Writing Chain: In my opinion by Class 23

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 In my opinion, there are too many singers and singer groups in Korea. Also, people becdome thier fans just because they are handsome or pretty. I think singers and singer groups's members must have talents, not just pretty or handsome.
 SNSD, BoA, Lee-Hyo-Ree, SHINEE, Secret, 2NE1 and BingBang are good examples. However, Kara and Afterschool are bod examples. They are pretty, though. But their singing is almost trash. Have you ever listened "Bang!" lively? I have, but they didn't sing, they were almost yelling. Their dance was beautiful. However,singers have to good at singing. I think my mom can sing better than them. They are famous like others just because of their looking, which are little bit pretty. Besides them, other examples that are in front have talent. But, it may differamong people. For the bright side, Jo-Gwun is the best. His face is not such super handsome, but he is one of most popular singer. Why? He has many talents such as singing, dancing and entertaining. He has many things th show to audiences and his voice goes high. He is the finest singer, I think. And also, Lee-Hyo-Ree is one of the best singers and talented person for girls. Also, IU is good example for singers. She is cute and she also has talent at singeing. Lately, she did three level high-pitched tone. I think there are singers who are good at singing and also beautiful. And some singers aren't good at singing but good looking. however, there is some singers they aren't good at singing and bad looking. I think this kind of singers shouldn't be singer. Just because this job can earn lots of money some people like trash wants to be a singer. I strongly disaree with this. Our country wants good singers with good looking and have many talents.
 In conclusion, I wish many kinds of people that they are good at singing should become a singer in Korea. I want that some of Korea's singer should be changed into other people. They could be just regular people. Or they couold get another job, so we should lessen  the amount of singers in Korea.

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